SPF: Subsidence


157 05 May 22nd 2016

“Darling, I think we may have a subsidence problem.” Natasha set down a glass of wine and looked at the contents.

“Are you sure that it has nothing to do with how much you have drunk?”

Natasha gave Stanley a look that would have withered most people where they stood. “I am being serious! Come and have a look at this glass.”

Stanley sighed and stuck the newspaper on the side of the armchair as he stood up. When he looked at the glass he could instantly see that there really was a problem. One side of the house appeared to be sinking away so the liquid within the glass was at a perilous angle. Considering it may be a one-off, Stanley put his own glass next to it and watched the similar result.

Before he could say anything another wineglass was positioned beside it. Stanley looked at it, and then at little Tommy, and finally Natasha in panic.

The same realisation was on Natasha’s face as she grabbed her son. “Have you been drinking that?” He nodded slowly as if afraid he was in trouble.

Subsidence forgotten they rushed to the hospital. Little Tommy had been drinking bleach.

Written for Sunday photo fiction

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21 thoughts on “SPF: Subsidence

  1. Liked the early parts. For me the bleach bit came in too late. Dunno almost felt like it had nothing to do with the rest of the story i.e. the subsidence stuff. Seems like two ideas in one. Thanks for posting, see you next week 🙂

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    1. Well, it doesn’t have anything to do with the story so I probably did come across as two different ideas. But never mind, I just enjoyed writing it so I look forward to trying and seeing comes at next week 🙂

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    2. I’d like to add to Paul’s comment. For me it works, but only because of the picture. Take that away, and there’s nothing telling me the third glass was something to worry about and as a consequence the bleach bit does feel a bit disconnected. Great story when one takes the picture into account though. Thank you, Angie.

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  2. I love your play on words. At first I thought you were going for confusion between a subsidence problem and substance abuse, but you took it in a different direction. Really well done, Angie.

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